Embers Of Change issue 1
Page 1
Panel 1: We see a black man, medium build, think Iron Fist, in all black attire, streamlined well fitted black jeans and black boots (Timberlands, keep it stylish) looking over the side of the roof. On one foot Captain Morgan style looking down with binoculars at a warehouse. Do the shot over the shoulder far off from the back. Side angle so we can see as much of Khado as possible.
Caption: I’ve been at this warehouse forever just looking in through a roof for signs of life.
SFX He sighs. Back to Caption: for the past eight hours. I wonder if any of the other great detectives started out this way.
Panel 2: Close up shot of floor by Khado. Show empty bags of chips or food wrappers. Signs he’s been here for awhile. Setting is night and place is Detroit, Michigan at 2am.
Caption: Maybe Sherlock Holmes passed out on his first case. Or the Hardy Boys over ate on a stakeout.
Panel 3: Show a shot of Khado from behind rubbing his wrists with a slight smirk on his face. From the nose down is fine
Caption: Even prison wasn’t that bad. I was nowhere near as bored. Doesn’t matter all that much now. I’m on a new fitness plan…
Page 2
Full shot splash page. We’re underneath Khado looking up as he dives head first towards us off the side of the roof, black jacket flapping like a cape revealing a fairly defined muscular dark skinned man, dark brown complexion. Make sure his dive is close to the building will be using that later.
Caption: Vengeance!!Burns calories and kicks all types of ass!
Also for this shot Khado is wearing two sais on each leg on the outside. They don’t necessarily have to be revealed but sowing a glint of steel is fine. Also add a sinister smirk to his face as he dives.
Page 3 All the caption is Khado’s self narration
Panel 1: It’s daylight and Khado is walking outside. He’s wearing a wife beater and blue jeans. Nothing significant. He is looking forward, determined; you can see it in his eyes. In the background are small houses, mom and pop stores, barbershops kids jumping rope. All the people are all or mostly black. Don’t forget Khado’s build is pretty noticeable, think Tyrese Beckford but at a 5’8 stature with a low/light afro and dark brown skin tone. Khado is being viewed from the front right side dominant in shot walking forward hurriedly.
Caption: I never cared about crimes. They’re really necessary evils. Who knows what craziness white people do without their drugs. It’s not like black people started that shit. Crack, cocaine, heroin, speed, Vicadent it never ends.
Panel 2: We’re close up to Khado’s face as he looks up to his left and see four little black girls playing double dutch. There is a unhideable grin on his face. Not elation but not a slight grin either but a genuine expression of joy. They’re about 10 yrs old with thin frames. They are singing a song while they play. Show two in the rope jumping together and two swinging the rope one on each side. The song is Ciara and Missy Elliot’s music make me lose control. The beat is playing on a boom box in the background.
Sfx. BRRRRRMMMM, BBBRRRMMMMM(MUSIC MAKES ME LOSE CONTROL!!)
Caption: Do you really need so much garbage in your system to look your daughter in the face and say everything is alright in the world. Like what I’m seeing right now. That’s beautiful.
Panel 3: Khado is running now and in the front on his right side we see a few black men pushing their hands into their jackets in a hurried fashion. The smile has now faded from Khado’s face and he shows the disdain of one who hates what he sees and knows there isn’t anything he can do to change this reality. Further up that street is a cop car barreling down the road.
Caption: Disgusting. I ain’t blind to the trash my people do for drugs. Gives dreamers the chance to keep dreaming. Gives dealers a reason to hit the streets. And gives pigs the chance to oink at us and kick us around like we lived in a sty. Alright, maybe the last part was too generous but their racist ways would be more apparent if we didn’t give them a chance to get at us. With a problem like that where do you look for the solution and who is really the problem.
Panel 4: Khado has just reached his destination and pushes the doors open with the same fervor and zest we saw him running with. The exhaust from running pales in comparison to the rage in his eyes and on his face. Muscles are tense and ready for action as well. This is a front shot. A few faces of people in the seats are staring afraid and tense while barbers step back. Shot isn’t too spread out but we’re in the middle of the barbershop lined up with the door seeing the barbers and the people there cutting on the right of the shot like a ballroom each barber and customer getting closer to us as the shot expands.
Sfx: BLLAAMM. CRASHHHH.
Barber 1: (the barber furthest away)Oh shit!!
Customer almost jumps out of chair from barber 2. Customer in barber 1’s chair flinches back.
Barber 2: Fuck man! Your scaring my customers!! Calm yourself. Don’t make me cut you!!
Caption: The real reason why I’m here is a bit selfish. I just found out my sister Rebecah was raped by a neighborhood dealer. AND I WANT ANSWERS!
Khado: JAAKKKKEEEEEEEEE!!!! GET THE FUCK OUT HERE!!!!
Page 4
Caption: Sometimes you don’t have to look too hard for your answers. Like if you want to know whats going on in the street talk to your barber.
Panel 1: Full shot Jake the barber is being lifted up off the floor and slammed against his mirror pane. Sfx: Whoomp and CRASSH for glass breaking from impact. Action happens quickly so show customer in barber chair flying out the way as if pushed. Jake is heavyset, dark, with a bald head.
Khado: You know why I’m here. TALK!!
Jake: Ahuh!! ( Air knocked out of him) He’s trying to pry Khado’s hands off his chest
Panel 2: Medium Shot of the barber spanning into a wide shot of outside the barbershop. Jake is struggling to point at a don’t walk sign. We see shirtless muscular black men doing pull-ups on the Don’t walk post. Khado’s eyes are filled with rage as his muscles tense up as he applies force to Jake’s chest.
Caption: Sometimes you can pick up the most random piece of information from them like if you want to be a male escort talk to a brother doing pull-ups on the street.
Khado: What was that? It seems your fat got in the way of your words. SPEAK UP!! Where are they?
Jake: (Struggling) IIIII DDDDDON’T KNNOOWWWWWW! Talk to him! He’s got your answers!
Panel 3: Long Shot here. We can see Jake isn’t pointing at any of the guys doing pull-ups but at a guy laying on the floor in shoddy clothes. Basically it’s a reprise of the previous shot just longer so we can clearly see the man Jake is pointing at. Khado has loosened his grip to run down the guys at the Don’t walk post.
Jake: Not him man, HIM!!
Panel 4
Close up shot of the strewn out man. Panel can be the smallest on page but make sure details are visible so we can notice features of the man. He is light skinned, handsome, if it weren’t for the chunk of flesh missing from his left cheek. He has very hairy unkempt cornrows. For some reason has little hair on his face except for a light mustache and goatee.
Caption: And sometimes when it comes to crime you have to know a criminal or in this case a crackhead to get what you need. Thankfully I grew up under this one.
Page 5
Wide panel shot of Khado in front of Nick standing looking down. This is multi shot panel as in while we’re looking down at Nick with Khado we see images from left to right in the behind Nick. On the left is a six year old Khado looking up at Nick for the first time. Make sure there is some curiosity on his face. Then in the center of this panel draw Khado standing facing forward with his arm being used to wipe his tears and Nick with a hand on his shoulders as if to comfort him. Nick is smiling bent over looking at him. On the far right for the final background shot draw Khado with a broken glass bottle in his right hand holding up his pants with his left hand tears flowing down his face and Nick is on one knee holding his left cheek bleeding profusely. Khado is seven here and at an average kids height and weight. These illustrations don’t need to be in color but they must be clear in regards to action.
Caption: Nick was the older brother I never wanted. Nick was there while I had lived on the streets. He was there when I needed a friend to talk to. He was there when I made a decision to take care of myself. No matter what.
Khado: NICK!!!
Panel 2
Medium shot of Khado picking up Nick off the floor. He is still looking groggy almost between highs. In Khado’s face we see anger mixed with pity. Make this a wide enough shot to show Khado in the background as a little boy sitting with a little girl at a table reading. Faces don’t need to be that clear but should show that they’re no older than 10 in this shot. Also no color or faded colors to illustrate this is a past memory.
Caption: That’s how I lived until I was almost eight. Seems like forever. Back then I knew nothing else. Then I met Rebekah and my whole life changed and yet here I am with a crackhead.
Khado: Nick, I know what you need and you’ll get it if I get what I want. Get me?
Nick: Yeah?! What do I need? Huh boy? What’s that?
Panel 3: Medium shot of Khado snatching a chain off of Nick’s neck.
Caption: I know him all too well and he has always been careless. Carrying his supply like it was a crucifix. Hard to tell in this state what reaction I’ll get from him.
Nick:???OH NOT That!! Where did you find that? I need that. Please don’t do me that way! Give that back!! Hmmmm Please?
Caption: Exactly what I hoped for. He’s a walking invalid now. He’ll sell me his mother when he’s like this. Thankfully he only has to tell me who I have to hunt down and where they’re going to be and I’ll take of the rest myself.
Panel 4:
Close up shot of Khado’s mouth showing a sly grin.
Caption: I’ll take care of the rest pal.
Panel 5: Full shot Khado running off the side of the building he jumped down at the beginning of the book.
Caption: Now I have to do things I’d rather not be doing. Like walking around with sais. And jumping off of rooftops. Threaten Nick with the possibility of losing his drug supply. And getting arrested for spitting on a cop. While that might be assault I’ll never see the inside of a cell. My abilities guarantee it.
Page 6
Wide shot of a warehouse from page 2 on the side. We see a small black car pull up to the front of that building, windows of the car tinted to hide the people inside. There’s another car, black convertible, that is already parked with two men coming out of the doors. One of these men is wearing an all black suit with a feather in a black felt hat and the other is wearing a black doo rag and a black wife beater exposing his muscles. Both men are black and the muscular guy is dark skinned smooth face and the man in the suit has well shaped mustache with permed straight hair in a pony tail visible on his black suit and purple suit. Sfx: Screech!! Car has dust in the back as it pulls in. Khado is running towards the building from the back end out of the car’s vision. His coat is flapping in the wind like a cape.
Caption: I almost wish I could hear what their saying. At least I know their names thanks to Nick. The guys who should be getting out of the car now are Moe and Curly. Easy pickings from what I’ve heard. The man with the peacock feather in his hat is Marky Rothschild, one of the worst dealer/pimps in Detroit. And there is my guy with a bald head to show off his tribal skull tattoo Charlie Wetum. From what I heard and seen no one knows his real last name but I can say firsthand how he got it. I guess anyone else could to if they found anyone who has ever opposed him. Yeah that’s right he doesn’t have anyone; no one who’s alive.
Panel 2:
Long shot as we close in to side of the warehouse. Khado is on the side of the warehouse spying from behind a crate and Moe and Curly come out of the parked car. Moe is shorthand for Mohammed and he is a huge man of 6’5, all muscle, with two guns under shoulder in a holster. He is wearing a wife beater for easy access to his guns. Curly is shorthand for Cole Lewis. He has curly permed hair and brown skin and brown eyes. He is 5’9 in height, wearing a black leather jacket and black jeans and black and grey boots. He doesn’t look too muscular.
Caption: Nick’s descriptions were on point. They both must be Moe and Curly meaning everyone who Nick said would be here is here. Guess I should thank him later. Nah!
Panel 3:
Full shot we see everyone who has just arrived walking inside while Khado is spying through a window while trying to avoid being spotted.
Caption: Looks like everyone’s on the move. I best go do my thing.
Page 7-8
Panel 1:
Huge double page full wide angle shot spanning the top half of both pages. We are seeing in the warehouse now in a wide angle full shot showing all the players who just arrived talking to each other in the warehouse. Khado is still outside but not seen in this shot. However there is a noticeable waft of gaseous air outside the window. Show the air flowing in a light steam waft through one of the windows outside. It’s like seeing gas the air is slightly distorted but appears clear. The men inside are standing up in a circle so we can see everyone’s bodies and features for the most part.
Charlie: If I told you once I told you a thousand times, bitches bring money and you got the best game on that in town. Just get your girls to sleep with him and who knows maybe the supply that I get can see an….inflation.”
Marky: Well don’t you sound sweet? But this idea is just a tad one-sided. What is the reason a gentleman like myself would partake in such an endeavor?
Charlie: First off your bitches…ahem. Sorry. Your COLLATERAL would get you intel. Second that guy controls, uh I don’t know what, but it’s big and I want a piece. And you know I’m good for it. Who runs shit in this Motown? This fuckin funk soul brother, haha!
Marky: You do make an enticing argument Sir Charles. I however have a better one…
Panel 2:
We get a full shot of Khado observing the grounds.
Caption: No one else is here. Couldn’t have hoped for better.
Panel 3:
We get another full shot of Khado running head held down so as not to be seen and heading to the entrance of the warehouse.
Caption: Hope I’m prepared for this. As if they stand a chance.
Panel 4:
Close up shot of Marky tapping his Bluetooth on his ear to receive a message. We see the light activated. Sfx: Brrrr, Brrrrrr
Off camera we hear the Sfx of something crashing down which we later find out later is the door.
We also hear mixed exclamations: What the fuck! Who the fuck! Who’s the ass!
Page 9:
Panel 1
Wide shot to show doorway blown down into building with a huge cloud of steam appearing like a thick mist floating into the warehouse. Marky and Charlie barely flinch. Charlie peers his face into the mist as if he recognizes a face as Moe and Curly draw their guns and get ready for trouble. Moe has two guns so he’s clearly ready for war.
Charlie: What the fuck?! Is that you Khado? I can’t see your face but I knew a nigga like you would have to face me. Sadly now ain’t your time to live. This is the way the world works. Things change when I say they do!
Khado shouts back from within the mist: Fuck you. And Moe and Curly too!
Panel 2
Long shot Curly aims his gun now at Khado. We’re seeing this at a distance slightly from over Khado’s shoulder. Moe is also visible in this shot as he trains his gun on the location of Khado.
Curly: You mother fucker!! I think you’re in over your head.
Moe : You sure that’s Khado? Kinda looks like Jacky who be on Woodward Avenue.
Curly: Shit you sure nuf right.
Panel 3: High shot above Curly and Moe. Here we can clearly see the environment has some strange looking invisible gas that has surrounded everyone there. Khado also facially does resemble someone else. This is a mirage created by his abilities which will be addressed more directly. Curly and Moe are staring at each other clearly confused by what’s happening. Charlie is also looking puzzled as well.
Caption: I guess my powers have taken affect. Glad to see these guys aren’t seeing straight. Will ensure no one will come after me afterwards. Could have blown my cover but what are they waiting for.
Panel 4
Marky steps off of his Bluetooth call. This is a low angle where we we’re looking up at Marky as he looks over at Curly, Moe and Charlie. He is drawing his gun out as well. Khado is tensing up here preparing himself for the oncoming attack. Charlie is now looking more focused at Khado as if who he is doesn’t matter as long as he catches a bullet.
Marky: Ya’ll ain’t waste this uppity negro yet??
Charlie: Alright niggas, Let’s waste him!!
Page 10
We see Khado from a bird’s eye view shot from slightly above him. He is now engulfed in an invisible air waves that flow around him a lot like flames. Everyone is facing him now and bullets are firing at a rapid rate.
Caption: I have to pour it on full force now. Only two options either this works or I die.
Panel 2
Medium shot of Khado running toward Charlie while the bullets are hitting and disappearing into the invisible air around him. Khado is drawing out on of the sais that are at his side and getting ready to toss it. He holds it with the hilt sticking out between ring and middle finger. He is tossing one with his left hand and holding one armed with his right hand.
Panel 3
Full shot from a low angle we see Khado jumping backwards to the side as he tosses a sai into the leg of Moe. It hits Moe in side of his knee. He falls backwards from the pain and tosses his guns from his hands.
Sfx. ARRGHHH (shouted by Moe)
Panel 4
One of the guns slides over to Marky who takes the time to notice it instead of firing at Khado. He is clearly focused on something else. This is a worm’s eye view shot with Marky looking down at us.
Page 11
Panel 1
Full shot of Charlie and Curly staring at each other with us able to see Charlie face mostly. Khado is running out of sight into hiding.
Charlie: Keep shooting! He ain’t no Super Nigga!!
Sfx: BLAM, BLAM Succesive gun fire
Panel 2
We see Khado from a full shot enemies point of view. Running and getting visually harder to see. The gas is slowly making him seem to blend into the background. Definitely more sfx as gun shots ring out in a frantic attempt to hit Khado.
Panel 3
Wide angle shot to show the area. Khado is still there but visually is no longer seen by Charlie or Curly because he looks invisible to them while standing in the darker areas of the warehouse. Charlie is staring at Curly with a confused look on his face and Curly has a similar look as they stare in bewilderment at one is going on.
Charlie: What the Fuck?!
Page 12
Panel 1
This is a low angle shot of Charlie and Curly kicking over boxes as they search the warehouse to find Khado. Guns are still armed Charlie is confused and Curly is somewhere between shocked and afraid.
Charlie: Where that mother-fucker go? ARGH!?!
Sfx: Crash!
Panel 2
We’re in a full shot seeing Khado holding the wrist of Curly now. Marky and Charlie are both staring horrified as they steam rising up from Curly’s wrist as it’s being burned on a cellular level. It’s the same hand with the gun so his hand open and the gun has been released. The area is even turning gray around Khado’s hand. We can see Curly struggling to free his hand but with no avail. It’s like seeing a kid pulling a toy from underneath a car; no movement except from the kid.
Khado: What was that about Super Nigga?
Sfx: SSSSSSSSSSSSsss
Curly: sfx SHHARRRGHHHHH
Panel 3
High angle shot showing Curly pulling his arm away. The damage has been done with his forearm looking a terrible shade of white and gray still smoldering from the hold.
Curly: Oh God, Oh God, Oh God! It’s on FIRE!!
Panel 4
Worm’s eye view shot of Curly rolling on the floor holding his wrist, face in anguish as Khado is walking past him towards Marky and Curly
Page 13
Panel 1
Wide angle shot as Marky is seen making an escape for himself. Khado is visible to some extent but his face doesn’t look like his own emphasizing the distortion in vision that is occurring now for everyone here. He is standing looking like a predator about to come down hard on his prey. Marky is lookie at Charlie in this shot
Marky: Shit. Lookee here sir, we’ll continue our talk later. I bid you fellows adieu
Panel 2
Full shot from Khado’s viewpoint, Marky is running now to the door in the back of the warehouse away from everyone. We see Charlie’s head swivel between Marky and Khado as he keeps his gun trained on Khado.
Charlie: Bitch Ass Nigga (addressed to Marky) Why you doing this son?(addressed to Khado)
Panel 3
Full circle wide angle shot displaying Khado and Charlie standing facing each other in a panoramic shot. His gun still in hand but not pointed at Khado but still up and ready.
Charlie: We was just talking. We ain’t do shit but show we can defend ourselves. You ain’t even a cop. Probably why I ain’t poppin shots at you now. You show guts. Guts like I’ve never seen before. Jacky you join up with me and I won’t run a train in that bitch, Sharice, who you like so much.
Panel 4
Full circle panoramic shot where we are seeing Khado from Charlie’s viewpoint. It almost looks like Khado is smiling from Charlie’s viewpoint.
Charlie: Plus think of the perks. Money, Brothers-in-arms, bitches, protection, I got it all right here. What could be better than that?
Panel 5
Extreme close up shot of Khado’s mouth.
Khado: Satisfaction
Page 14
Panel 1
Low angle shot of Khado tossing the remaining sai into Charlie left arm forcing him to drop his weapon. Charlie is clearly in pain from getting stabbed like this so show it on his face as he shouts.
Sfx: SHEEARGH!!
Panel 2
Close up shot of Marky outside from the back peering inside with a full shot of Charlie holding his arm in pain. We see Khado walking forward to Charlie with a look of satisfaction on his face.
Page 15
Panel 1
Medium Shot of Khado almost running toward us but we’re looking from Charlie’s viewpoint seeing Khado approach him while he’s wounded. Charlie looks angry and afraid.
Charlie: Get the fuck away from me!!
Caption: I block out what he said. All I think is you raped my sister you sick fuck!
Panel 2
Medium shot from Khado’s right side revealing a backhand from Khado’s left hand connecting with Charlie’s face
Panel 3
Medium shot showing Khado pulling Charlie up by his wife beater and kneeing him in the stomach hard. Sfx: Whoomp. Show Charlie coughing up blood onto Khado’s shirt.
Caption: I won’t let up. Not on a scumbag like him. I don’t even care about the blood. I’ll think about that later. But for now he needs to feel her pain!
Panel 4
A close up shot of a crack to the jaw.
Sfx. Crrck
Panel 5
A close-up shot of an elbow to the jaw.
Sfx: Crack!
Panel 6
A close up shot of a kick to the stomach as Khado uses the momentum of Charlie falling back to pull his sai out of Charlie’s arm.
Caption: I pull it out just to see him squirm. Maybe I should end this.
Panel 7
We see Khado from a low angle shot holding a sai over the now helpless Charlie as he is getting ready to thrust his sai into the now helpless Charlie.
Caption: For the first time I’m about to use my sai and everything seems clear to me now
Panel 8
We see Charlie wince in shock and pain in a close up shot of his face as we hear off camera the sound effects of Khado’s sai digging into him.
SFX: Shrnk!!
Page 16
Panel 1
Wide angle shot of everyone in the room including Khado standing over Charlie as well Moe passed out in a pool of his own blood. The sai is still in his knee. Curly’s crying in pain.
Caption: I see Moe has passed out. Guess I was too much for him. Should have dished out worse.
Panel 2
Close up shot revealing Khado never stabbed Charlie but the ground next to him and is now pulling out the blade from the ground. In the close distance we see Curly’s aiming his gun with the only usable hand he has to shoot Khado in the face. Blood pouring down his face coating one eye Curly doesn’t seem to mind as long as he kills Khado.
Caption: You’re one determined man Curls. You’re still trying after all I did to you? Almost feel bad now
Curly: Killl Youu!!
Caption: You can’t make that shot in your condition. You can barely see.
Panel 3
We see the fury and rage in Curly’s face as tears stream down and he pulls the trigger. This is a close up low angle shot to emphasize the bullet coming down on us.
Sfx: Blam!!
Caption: And then I hear it
Panel 4
We have a close-up head shot of Khado with his eyes closed as if in prayer
Caption: It’s faint but I hear it asking me from the bottom of my soul, Is this what you want?
Page 17
Panel 1
Close up shot of Khado turning around to pull the sai out of Moe’s leg. His Back is turned to us and we’re seeing this all from the viewpoint of the bullet as it hurtles toward Khado’s head.
Caption: I already know the answer so I’ll do my best to make sure he’ll walk later.
Panel 2
Close up shot of bullet hitting an invisible wall around Khado and flying away. SFX: PEEYOOM
As bullet ricochets.
Panel 3
We see Cole panicking as Khado walks over and past him. Medium shot from a low angle so we see all of Cole but little above the waist of Khado. Cole is weeping tears of fear and shame.
Caption: My fight is done here. Curly will live without my help. Just one more thing to do
Panel 4
We see Khado bandaging Charles’ arm wound while he is too limp to protest much. Medium Close up shot with Charles’ leaning up to get bandaged looking at Khado with vicious hate in his eyes.
Charles: Fuck you!!
Caption: I only do what I can to ensure these mean will live. For better or worse. Will this be enough?
Panel 5
Full shot of Khado walking out of the warehouse now. To his right we see Marky staring at him completely afraid to move forward or back or any direction for that matter.
Panel 6
Full shot of Khado staring at Marky with fierce eyes leaning forward to say boo. Marky falls backward. Sfx: thud
Khado: BOO!
Marky: Ahh!
Page 18
Panel 1
We seeing Khado in a wide angle shot walking blocks away from the warehouse. He is now casually walking with an air of humbleness to him and pride. In the background we see red and blue lights shining off of houses in the background and hear the thuds of boots running and guns removing safety and bullet chambers checked on the fly.
Caption: It’s about a block or two before I hear them. Sirens.
Panel 2
We know see what Khado was seeing. A ton of cop cars are barreling down the street now in the direction of the warehouse. Many cops are running down the block with protective gear as well. Think cops looking to subdue a rowdy mob type of gear.
Sfx: wrrrrrr, wrrrrrrr
Caption: That’s a lot of cops. Too many! Is this all for me? I don’t think I’m ready this kind of publicity.
Panel 3
Full shot but from the viewpoint of a female cop running past him amongst the other cops but looking different from them. She has regular street clothes on. The only thing revealing she is a cop is badge fastened to the outside of black jacket. She is staunchly beautiful woman with long golden hair and yellow skin, smooth facial features comparable to Gloria Velez and matching curves. Maybe slightly smaller in weight but not noticeably so. This cop is staring at Khado as she runs past even as some other cops keep running forward not noticing him at all.
Caption: Ok, that’s new. Why is this lady staring at me so hard? Does she know about that incident already? Does she suspect me?
Panel 4
Wide angle shot of the female cop, Detective Renee Sliver, still running with the group turning her head to look in the same direction of the group of cops
Det. Renee: Alright boys, let’s go in and clean up!
Cops: UMMN!!!(This is pretty much a sound effect because of how many cops are here. I want the full force!)
Panel 5
We get a close up shot that pans into a wide angle shot from Renee’s viewpoint of her staring back at Khado again. So we clearly observe she is staring at him even as the rest of the cops are moving forward towards the warehouse.
Sfx: Grunts, Foot steps
Panel 6
Close up shot of Renee’s face as she is clearly puzzled by what she is looking at about Khado.
Page 19
Panel 1
Wide angle shot of Renee running forward with fellow cops. Her hair flowing in the wind and bewilderment stuck on her face.
Renee(Internally):Strange. Who is that kid?
Panel 2
Full shot of Marky over at the warehouse talking on his Bluetooth as walks over towards his fallen comrades.
Marky: And I thought I told you never to go out there. You keep talking like this and I might have to learn you some manners. You don’t want me to do that do you? You’re a good girl aren’t you?
Woman: talking back (sfx Of course Daddy. But I…)
Marky: (addressing woman) Hold on Bitch
Panel 3
Marky leans in close on this close up shot of him kneeling down to talk to Charlie.
Marky: I made the call Charles. You’re in. Now let me borrow your gun for a little clean up.
Panel 4
Full shot of Marky leaning over Moe now to pick the bandages off of his body. He is using the part covered in blood to cover the guns. So some of the bandages are still on Moe but Marky is clearly prying them off of him to cover the gun’s handle.
Marky: Sorry Sir. This is just business.
Panel 5
Full shot of Marky nudging Moe over with his foot and shooting him simultaneously. Make it a slightly wide shot to incorporate the fact that Curly/Cole is still in the warehouse and is witnessing the murder of his partner. Curly face is stricken in rage.
Panel 6
Worm’s eye view shot of Curly looking up at Marky. Curly has a look of utmost rage with a tinge of fear mixed in Marky is standing above him. I want both faces as visible as possible in this situation. Marky has the look of a snake devouring a frog, of sheer satisfaction.
Curly: Why man?
Marky: Where’s your manners?! Don’t you pay attention when people talk? Pardon me, where are my manners. I’d hate to keep you in suspense like this.
Panel 7
Extreme close up on Curly’s face completely stricken in horror and fear. Sweat flowing pretenses fade.
Curly: (internally) I don’t want to die. I don’t want to die. Lord, I don’t wanna die!! Shante, I love you…”
Sfx: BLAM!!
Panel 8
Head shot of Curly on the floor laid out thanks to the bullet to the temple. Show the whole in the head and pool of blood behind his head.
Page 20
Panel 1
Wide shot of Marky now with Charles picking him up off the floor.
Marky: I got you bro. Let’s get out of here. Remember to thank me later.
Panel 2
Wide angle shot we see Marky carrying Charlie out the back of the warehouse as cops are readying themselves to enter.
Panel 3
Full shot of Marky walking over to an officer who is nearest to him still with Charlie’s arm across his back.
Marky: You can go inside now. Thank me later for the gifts.
Panel 4
Full shot of cops entering the room rushing past Marky and Charlie as if they never saw him. Make it apparent that the cops aren’t focused at all about Marky’s presence.
Panel 5
Wide shot of cops entering room while Renee is already there with some of her men. She is kneeling down looking at the victims and observing the crime scene. She is nearest to Moe so as far she can tell it’s a murder scene. Everything is visible in regards to Moe and Curly.
Cop 1 who came from the back: Nothing to report ma’am. What are we dealing with here?
Cop closest to Moe: (he’s checking a pulse) This one is dead ma’am.
Det. Sliver: And what about the other one?
Panel 6:
Medium shot slight high angle shot of Curly coughing still laying flat on the floor. In this shot his head is fully healed and the bullet that went into his head a second ago is now gray shards laying next to him. Cops next to him are pulling back. And at the farthest end of this shot we see Renee pushing a man out of the way to see what is going on. She is rushing forward to Curly.
Renee: Out of the way boys!
Panel 7
Full shot of the cops we saw earlier coming from the back of the warehouse are standing together with grim expressions on their faces now that they’ve heard Curly’s alive. Voices from in the background can be heard around them.
All off camera
Renee: Get him some medical attention and keep watch! I want him brought in for questioning.
Cops: Yes ma’am!
Page 21
Panel 1
Wide angle shot of officers leaving with both bodies one in a body bag and one being held up by a few men. These men are the now deceased Moe and the badly wounded Curly. As these men are running out with these bodies outside of the warehouse a few men are walking in a different direction. Show one of them pulling out a phone.
Panel 2
Close up shot of an officer’s mouth.
Cop: We got a new package
Panel 3
Close up of another mouth.
Thank God. We were running low. Anyway what about the other
Panel 4
Medium shot of three cops one of whom is on the phone. The cop on the phone pulls the phone away to stare at the other men.
Cop 1: How the hell does he know that there’s more than 1?
Cop 2: I don’t know (accentuate fear of mystery man on phone)
Cop 3: Hurry up and answer him!
Panel 5
Medium shot of Cop 1 back on the phone. Other cops are now just watching quietly as if their true commanding officer was this man.
Cop 1: The second is alive. It isn’t confirmed how that came to be but we’re looking into it.
Panel 6
Close up shot of the man on phone’s mouth.
Man: I understand. Keep me posted.
Panel 7.
Wide panel shot a bright room with a piano and a desk with scattered paperwork all over it. The man is playing the piano. The melody is quite soothing. The man is dressed in a white overcoat and there is a woman who is talking to him. Neither of these people are facing the camera.
Man addresses the woman: Give them that for now and tell them that I’ll have the next bunch ready real soon.
Woman in white: Got it doctor.
Panel 8
Wide angle shot of woman wheeling mail cart out of the door with fetuses sticking out of it. Doctor is playing more in sync and emphatically.
Doctor: Oooohhh, I can’t wait! New Bodies, new subjects and a possible awakened sighted. Things keep getting better and better.
Page 22
Panel 1
Full shot of Khado sleeping on a bed. He’s in his room just layed out on his bed, his sais strewn along with his clothes around him as he sleeps in his wife beater and resting peacefully.
Panel 2
Curly is in a hospital coincidentally the same hospital with Doctor Houston. That is the doctor whom we’ve been seeing for the last page. Wide angle shot of Curly with a respirator attached to his face helping him breath.
Panel 3
Full shot of Renee watching Curly from the outside of his hospital bed with a look of worry on her face.
Panel 4
Long Shot of a highway trailing into the city of Detroit showcasing busy streets and fast paced driving.
Panel 5
Close up shot of a sign on that highway shown to those entering the city. The sign says in Latin “Speramus Meliorax” and translate this at the bottom of the page.
Translate ‘We hope for Better for things.’
End
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