Embers of Change issue 2
Page 1
Panel 1
Khado is dreaming here. The only two colors I want here are a blue aura for Renee and a violet one for Khado. This is a long shot to reprise the same scenes from issue 1 in which Khado and Det. Renee Sliver are staring at each other. We are looking forward and while Khado is in front of us and Det. Sliver is further out show them standing and staring at each other. This shot can double as a flashback with everyone other than Khado and Renee being shot in grey.
Khado: What is your deal? Your eyes, it feels like you’re staring into my soul.
Det. Sliver: I’m trying to. Pretty good guess stranger.
Panel 2
Two shot done from a low angle. We see Renee walking up to Khado proud stride with her coat slightly open to reveal cleavage. We are slightly behind Khado as he prepares to defend himself. In this shot he merely tenses up but doesn’t reveal anything such as his weapons.
Renee: I don’t know what bugs me more. The fact that you can make such a good guess or that I can’t return the favor. It feels like I’m staring into the abyss except you’re hidden behind an opaque glass.
Khado: Now it’s my turn to blush.
Panel 3
This is a full shot at low angle of Khado standing facing Det.Sliver and his eyes are glowing white. He has a smug look on his face.
Khado: Not many people have pegged me so soon. Actually you’re the only one who has gotten so close without my consent. Yeah you. But you do know this will be as good as it gets right?
Renee: Sfx Sucking teeth
Panel 4 This is a close up shot of Renee’s mouth. She is licking her lips in a sultry way.
Renee: MMmm, intriguing…
Page 2
Panel 1
This is a medium shot of Renee and Khado standing right in front of each other and Renee is poking at Khado’s chest.
Renee: Don’t get cocky. I love a good mystery. I’ll even say I’ve got nothing. Except this. I know what I’m seeing is a lie. I don’t accept lies. I will unravel this charade.
Panel 2
This is another medium shot but now we’re facing Khado who seems as amused as ever. Renee is still jabbing him in the chest with her finger.
Khado: You’re more than welcome to try. There’s one thing though, if you’re so certain that I’m caught then me knowing your name shouldn’t be a problem. What’s the name that’ll strike fear in my heart?
Panel 3
This is another medium shot with Renee holding her head forward with her hand on her brow being pressed together by her pointer finger and thumb. Khado is slightly below her in this shot.
Renee: Cute. Real cute. My name is Det. Sliver. And your ass will be in jail so fast you’ll wish you never saw me.
Panel 4
This is a low angle shot of Khado looking down at Det. Sliver.
Khado: I’m sorry I didn’t quite catch that name. I don’t speak bullshit. What was that again?
Panel 5
This is a medium shot of Det. Sliver facing Khado with no background. She is trying to shout but the dream is fading.
Renee. MY NAME IS DET. SLIVER! SLIVER! Sliver….sliver…..slive..rrrrr………….(show her repeating the name in lighter tones to demonstrate the fade out.
Page 3
This is a full page panel of Khado springing up from bed in a state of shock and horror. He is only in an undershirt here and boxer briefs. The room is slightly disheveled demonstrating a lack of care, clothes are strewn all over the floor.
Off Panel we are hearing Rebekah shouting to Khado
“Get the fuck up!!”
Caption: More effective than any alarm clock. Nothing like getting barked on to start your day off right. Can’t believe I chose to be here.
Page 4
Panel 1
This is a panoramic shot of a hospital room. We are outside looking in and can see Renee Sliver’s reflection off of the glass of the hospital room. Her reflection is in front of the name plate by the door marked Cole Lewis who we can see laying up inside the room on the hospital bed. He has a woman looking dotingly at him and a young girl standing next to her who looks no older than six.
Renee internally: What a fiasco. He was supposed to be my collar. Him and his untouchable friends. Not only were we too late but now I have to fluff his pillows. He couldn’t look any happier.
Panel 2
This is a low angle shot of Cole looking up at a news broadcast of issue 1’s fight. The tv is one of those really small hospital tv’s. Make sure to note Cole’s forehead and skull should be bandaged up. He is laying between Shante, his girlfriend who is light skin with light brown eyes and close to brick house curves with said curves busting out of her top and corn rows for a hair style. Her braids are very thin and are mostly black and golden. His daughter Shanice is six. Her face looks like a mini version of her mom’s.
Shante: You haven’t said a single word since I came in here.
Cole: Damn babe can’t you see I’m focused. No one has got anything on this guy. And it’s been 12 hrs. 12!!
Shante: You sure you gonna be ok?
Panel 3
This is a close up shot of Cole’s face. He is sweating and looks nervous. Shante has her hand holding his cheek.
Shante(Off Panel): It’s going to be okay baby. Best believe someone gon’ catch that bitch.
Cole internally: I’m looking real soft right now. No random dick gon’ disrespect me so freely.
Panel 4
This is a medium shot of Cole leaning up on his bed and looking over at the pretty black girl standing behind Shante. She has hazel brown eyes like dad but the same complexion as her mother. She is really young so not all of her teeth have grown in.
Shante: Go say hi to daddy Shanice.
Cole: C’mon baby don’t be shy give daddy one your giant sized hugs
Shanice: Ok
Panel 5
This is a full shot as we see Cole turning toward Shanice and sitting up on the bed and Shanice bursting forward to hug him. She lands into him pretty strongly as she wraps her arms around his neck.
Shanice: DADDY!!!
Cole: Awww baby girl! Dad’s missed you! How you been? Taking care of mommy?
Shanice: Where have you been dad?
Cole: You know dad likes to travel. Can’t sit still while an adventure is out there. That’s how daddy helps mommy and you y’know?
Panel 6:
Shanice is now standing pulled in with her arms crossed in front of her chest while Cole’s arms are holding out as if they long for her to be held by them again. We can see Cole’s face in this shot as it is an over the shoulder shot with the camera angle starting from around Cole’s waist but pulled back enough to show most of his body and the scene. Shante is in the shot now listening to Shanice talk to her father.
Shanice: Daddy is never home. And mommy cries often
Shante: Shanice!!
Shanice: Why doesn’t daddy just stop having adventures? Why let mommy cry all the time?
Shante: Shanice!! Little girl you stop that right this instance!
Shanice: But daddy….
Panel 7:
We see a extreme close-up of the doorknob as it’s being turned by a hand. The hand looks masculine.
Voice: Hate to break up this lovely family moment but we need to talk.
Page 5
Panel 1
We see the person who was opening the door is a strong jawed white male. He’s clean shaven and has charcoal black hair with steely gray eyes. He almost looks like a lady charmer but his jaw screams I can take a punch. He is wearing a brown blazer with a yellow tie on top of a black shirt. His badge is clearly seen dangling from around his neck. His pants are also a stylish shade of brown. He is walking towards Cole and his family in this seen and they all seem taken aback by his presence. This is a full shot of the officer shot from behind Cole as if we were seeing him for the first time with Cole. Cole is sitting up in his bed so we can see his full face too. Everyone is quite visible in this scene.
Detective Darren Rowan: (The man who has just walked in) I’m sorry to interrupt but I have important matters to discuss with your boyfriend there and depending on how he answers will decide the difference between whether he walks out of here with you or he walks out of here with me.
Shante: What if we don’t like neither of your choices?
Detective Rowan: Then he really walks out with me. You won’t like that option much I assume.
Cole: What happens then if I say yes?
Panel 2
Detective Rowan is now much closer to the family and the way he stands you’d almost assume he knew them for quite some time. The family is still wary of his presence but they don’t seem too afraid of him. But they do know he is the commanding force in the room so they act accordingly. The Det is standing between Shanice and Shante as he holds the rail on the side of Cole’s bed. This is a medium shot. He is looking down gently at Cole will a look of calm and sullenness to him. Cole is looking slightly more fearful than the rest.
Det. Rowan: Then you still have to make the real choice which can only come after you hear what I have to say. Can I ask that we speak in private.
Shante: Anything you can say in front of my baby you can say in front of me. Don’t come in here thinking because you’re a cop you can do whatever and boss us around.
Cole: Shante!
Panel 3
Detective Rowan is now whispering into Shanice’s ear in a close up shot. We see Shanice’s hand over her mouth and a look of shock in her eyes as Rowan tells her what he does.
Detective Rowan: Listen, Shante is it? I know all of what your boyfriend does, where he goes to do it, and with whom. I have files on him dating back to the first Wetum case of ’97 when young girls just wound up ‘missing’ all the way forward to the Alcove massacre. He doesn’t listen to what I have to say the truth comes out and your castle in the sky comes crumbling down. Get the picture?
Panel 4
Shante is now looking at Cole with her hand over her mouth sobbing profusely. Shanice is tugging at her mother pants leg looking sad as well. Detective Rowan is now the closest to Cole looking at him indepthly with a stern mixed face. Cole is leaning up now horrified and furious at Rowan as he grabs the metal bars to hold himself up.
Sfx: CL, CLANG
Cole: What did you say to her? What did you say to my woman, you piece of ….
Det. Rowan: Uh, Uh, Uh. Is that how your mother raised you? Watch that mouth of yours or I’ll let the world know what made her cry.
Shante: No! Don’t! We’re leaving!!
Cole: Wha??
Panel 5
Shante goes over to Cole and hugs him strongly. Shanice is still staring at her mother as confused and saddened as ever. Her cleavage is resting softly on Cole’s chest in an embrace only lovers could do. The shot is a medium shot slightly below Cole’s shoulder allowing us to see closely the couple embrace and view Shanice’s head as she looks at her mother. Cole’s face doesn’t really need to be seen in this shot but if you can get it in that would be awesome.
Shante: Ba, Baby. Just do as he says, ok? He knows so much. Everything I thought you put away. Be careful baby. I love you. Please be careful?
Cole: …..ok baby. I’ll listen to what he says. For us. I’ll listen.
Panel 6
Detective Rowan is back in the shot looking between Cole and Shante. The couple have let go of each other and Shante is standing upright still crying. Cole is now looking sternly at Rowan as he stand between the couple waiting anxiously for a reply. This is a Medium shot from the same view of the hug.
Rowan: So what was your decision?
Cole: Say what you got to say.
Rowan: Perfect answer. Who knows? Maybe this can be the beginning of a great partnership.
Panel 7
Shanice and Shante are holding each other’s hands in this scene which is a full shot of them walking away from Cole and heading for the door. Cole and Det. Daniel Rowan are looking over at them as they exit. Full shot
Shante: We’ll go then. Be careful baby.
Cole: You already know.
Rowan. Buh-bye now.
Page 6
Panel 1
Rowan is standing up facing Cole with a look of disdain on his face. Cole looks as though he’s bracing himself for the worst. It’s a slightly high medium shot at an angle from the bed allowing us to see both the faces of Cole and Rowan.
Rowan: Good. Well now as it stands you’re being in held in questions relating to The Warehouse incident of last night. We have it at good word that you were not selling drugs at that point last but you supposed to brokering a deal between the Wetum brothers. Am I right?
Cole: I ain’t saying nothing.
Rowan: Ah, then of course I’m right.
Panel 2
Rowan is now standing in front of the window with his back to us. We’re witnessing this from a low angle.
Rowan: We also have word that the brothers are looking to advance their stake in town and a new player is entering the mix promising more power and less hassles if they work for him. Am I right?
Cole: I told you before, I ain’t saying NOTHING! I won’t say that again.
Rowan: Once again your response says it all. Of course I’m right.
Panel 3
Rowan closes in on Cole with an air of finalization to him. He knows he’s right about everything so far so he has a smug smirk on his face as approaches Cole. Cole is staring back at him stunned. Full Shot
Rowan: We have an idea when the next meeting was supposed to take place but we haven’t received word back from our informant. At this point knowing this city it might be safe to assume he’s dead. This is where you come in. If you wish to protect your family it would be in your best interest to become our informant. You’d be protected by us legally and may even see a reduction in sentencing or a complete drop of charges. A clean slate.
Panel 4
Close up shot on Cole’s face turned to the camera, his left, us the reader. His face is torn between elation and horror.
Caption: What should I do? This could be the break I need but he’s holding all the fucking cards like I really have a choice here. But I ain’t no fucking snitch.
Panel 5
This is a full shot pulled back from the group in which we see Cole and Rowan look up to the door.
Sfx: Knock, knock
Panel 6
This is a close up shot of a woman’s hand turning the door knob from the outside.
From off panel: Maybe I should say a few words.
Page 7
Panel 1
This is a full shot of Khado leaning on his elbows after he was just barked on. He still looks in a daze but he’s very composed about his fluster. We see more of his room and the light from the doorway clearly shining over his body. The room is dark mostly otherwise with shots of daylight creeping in.
From the doorway we hear voices.
Mysterious voice 1: Didn’t you hear me. GET UP!!
Myserious voice 2: I think you already got him to do that. Sorry Khado.
Panel 2
We are now seeing the doorway and who just woke up Khado. On the left of the viewer is Khado’s sister Rebekah( only took a full issue to get the motivation for the story to appear right?) who looks extremely fine. She has soft long flowing permed hair that comes to almost the middle of her back. It’s long and curly and slightly brown. Her eyes are very warm with big brown iris’ and her face looks flawless with a small nose slightly broad forehead well hidden beneath her hair. She has full lips and even fuller breasts looking like she’s easily DD pushing DDD. She has a slim figure which carries her grace well and while her legs are long her ass is pretty big as well but in a sticks out from the back only sort of way. In this shot she is wearing a chic outfit consisting of tight jeans and a soft silk top exposing her cross on her neck and hanging low off of her left shoulder. Her friend is Tia a slightly shorter and darker skinned woman is far curvier than Rebekah but has an all natural afro which she wraps lightly so that the puff sticks upwards neatly. She could easily be pushing 150 but at 5’5 you wouldn’t notice anything other than her cleavage which is slightly bigger than Rebekah’s. She is wearing a long thin dress that covers her body is a hip hugging sort of way. Her eyes are slightly sharper but have an almost greenish brown hue.
Rebekah: I swear you are too soft on him
Tia: It’s not that. Maybe he had a rough night.
Rebekah: He never has a rough night. He never has any type of night. The guy doesn’t hang at all.
Panel 3
This shot is behind the back shot from Khado scratching his head and both Rebekah and Tia in full view. Rebekah is looking at Khado but more at the clothes he has laid out next to him.
Khado: You know ladies I’m still in the room. And for your info Rebekah I do go out. Just not every night.
Rebekah: And clearly not during the last century. Who told you it was cool to dress like an old man?
Tia: I think it’s kind of cute. Very refined.
Panel 4
Everyone’s head is turned now in the direction of Khado’s mom Linea who is downstairs making breakfast. She is not seen but heard here.
Linea: Breakfast is ready!
Panel 5
Everyone’s off panel as we see the back of Tia’s leg mid stride as Rebekah is already gone to get her meal. We are still viewing this scene from the back of Khado’s head.
Rebekah: If you don’t come down quick I’ll come back up here and find you.
Tia: Don’t mind her Khado. She reeeaaaallllly misses you.
Khado: Sigh, Welcome home Khado.
Page 8
Panel 1
This is a full shot where we are seeing a table with an assortment of breakfast goods including bacon, grits, tuna, onions, home fries and Cranbury juice. Linea is an older woman but has a refined sexiness to her. She seems to glow. Her skin is full and gives her the appearance of a woman who just turned 30. Her curves are fuller than her daughters and her about as long done in dreadlocks. She is staring up at the tv which is showing the news broadcasts of Khado’s raid last night. She has a remote in her hand pointed at the station as if she’s about to change it. Tia and Rebekah are already at the table with bacon and home fries with onions and cranbury juice on Rebekah’s plate and tuna with grits on Tia’s plate. Tia looks to be in motion getting something from the fridge which is underneath the tv and off to the right so I guess it would be in the back and middle of the shot with the a flat screen that is held high on the wall. Khado is the soonest to step into the room. He has already changed into a form fitting sweater that is stylish and some business slacks. We can see most of him as he enters the room.
Khado: Wow you really out did yourself mom!
Rebekah: (With mouth full) Jerk
Panel 2
We see Linea hugging Khado while Tia is looking up at him. Tia is smiling. Rebekah is still staring at him scornfully. We are still pulled back enough to see Rebekah as well.
Linea: Aww thank you sweety! I put some extra loving in that tuna. I know you’d love that.
Khado: Thanks mom. Not as much as I love you.
Panel 3
This is a head shot of Khado staring upwards. He looks almost concerned but no one can tell what is concerning him.(If you read issue 1 you would know J)
Off panel: Once again we are here live at Ground Zero which experts are now calling the gauntlet throwdown in the war on crime.
Khado: What???
Page 9
Panel 1
This is a medium shot with everything above the breakfast table being seen and really only the side where Khado is sitting at. Khado is getting ready to sit down next to Tia. She is looking up at him as if she may respond to him.
Tia: This has been playing for awhile now. Can’t turn a station without hearing about the vigilante
Internally Khado: So I’m a ‘vigilante’ now? Ugh this can’t get any better.
Khado: What have they been saying about this guy?
Panel 2
This is a medium shot of Rebekah leaning towards the tv with her hand pointed at it. Linea is now holding the remote close to her and staring at the tv as well. Khado is looking forward in this shot as Tia is focused on Rebekah as well. Images of a smoldering building are now being seen on the television along with
Rebekah: Listen and you’ll find out. There talking about him now.
TV announcer: …and reports are coming in that this could have all been the work of one man. So far yet there are no eye witnesses to prove what has happened our on staff expert Megan Scotto has this to say regarding the incident.
Panel 3
This is a close up shot of the news broadcast itself with the panel becoming the tv screen. We are seeing a brunette woman, Megan Scotto, of Mediterranean descent dressed in business attire with her legs crossed with her hands flailing.
Megan: This is clearly an attack on the establishment that is our society that will no doubt be covered up. I suspect this vigilante has only just begun and by no means is this an isolated incident. He will strike again and he will strike hard.
Page 10
Panel 1
We are viewing Khado’s face close up and seeing his anguish as he contemplates the situation. The shot is a medium shot though so while no one but him will be seen in it he is still doing an action such as eating breakfast.
Caption: Either I’m crazy or that woman seems to be too astute to be going on just hunches. Was someone watching me last night?
Panel 2
This is a medium shot of Rebekah leaning forward to wave her hand in front of Khado’s face to see if he is still with them in the room mentally. Tia is also looking at Khado slightly confused.
Rebekah: Earth to Khado? Are you there, please respond!
Panel 3
This is another medium shot of Khado staring back at Rebekah slightly peeved but not angry. Tia is looking at Khado slightly amused and Linea is looking at all of them as well.
Khado: Just thinking that was pretty deep.
Tia: Or pretty crazy. I mean vigilante c’mon. Who in this city cares about us?
Rebekah: And why go through the trouble? The law won’t so why should whoever? Who’s to say anything happened at all?
Linea: For one the burning building didn’t burn itself. Two you know who might have been attacked and this city doesn’t do anything but protect it’s ‘heroes’. Damn shame.
Panel 4
This is a close up shot of Khado whispering back and forth with Tia.
Khado: What heroes of the city? Has something changed since I’ve come back.
Tia: Yea tons. The heroes are the Wetum brothers.
Khado: Really?
Tia: Yeah. Ever since the recession hit us the drug game has gone through the roof. No one wants a legal job in this city.
Khado: I can’t believe this.
Tia: Believe whatever you want. That’s the way the city is right now. Lawless. Worse than when we were growing up.
Page 11
Panel 1
This is full shot pulled back enough so that we can see everyone in the room. Khado is pulling back from Tia and Tia is blushing as Linea stares at them with a smirk on her face. Rebekah looks as though she may spit up.
Linea: Sorry lovebirds but I think you two should break it up for a minute. I don’t know if you know this Khado but its now 11:30. Don’t you have class to teach?
Khado: Yeah? Ok I’ll head out then.
Tia: I don’t know where you get that idea from.
Panel 2
This is a medium shot of Khado kissing Linea on the cheek. Linea is slightly blushing.
Khado: Thanks for the meal, mom.
Linea: Just because you haven’t seen me in awhile doesn’t mean you have to butter me up. You can always stay with me. This is your home.
Panel 3
We see Khado walking out of the room briskly with suitcase in hand. The ladies are watching him as he goes in a slightly long shot.
Khado: Alright ladies I’ll see you later.
Tia: Bye Khado.
Rebekah: Later
Linea: Bye dear
Panel 4
We see Tia and Rebekah at the sink washing dishes. This is a medium shot.
Rebekah: You do like him, don’t you?
Tia: Who? Your brother? He’s cute. I wouldn’t mind tapping that.
Rebekah: Stop. Please. Stop.
Page 12
Panel 1
This is a splash page shot where we are seeing Grand Hope College for the first time. It’s like most colleges which are out of state in that it has a huge landscape. There is a median school building which should be about 4 floors high and the building itself is a nice shade of brown. There is a wide lawn where we see students(mostly black because of the area) whom are moving around as though they have something to do.
Caption: Grand Hope College. I can’t believe I’m here. This place is so vast!
Panel 2
This is a medium shot with Khado writing on a chalk board.
It’s so strange. This is my dream job but I can barely concentrate
Panel 3
This is a full shot done close where we see Khado handing out syllabus to people in the class.
Caption: At least the curriculum is all set.
Panel 4
This is another full shot where we Khado sitting on a desk folding away his paperwork as students are leaving the class.
Caption: And this stuff is all second nature.
Page 13
Panel 1
This is an overhead shot where we are seeing Khado looking down at a few Bunsen burners as he is in a class set up for chemistry study. He has on just the goggles but no lab coat.
Panel 2
This is a slightly high angle shot of an old man walking behind but towards Khado while he is still bent over looking at some vials. He doesn’t dress or look like much of an old man. His strides are long, there isn’t a crook in his back, and he is as sharply dressed as Khado wearing a white suit and holding his hair in a stylishly cut white afro. He has a refined air about him that resembles Morgan Freeman in just about every movie he’s done.
Khado: There is only one man I know bold enough to sneak up on somebody while their playing around with acids. My man Tehuti Braithwaite.
Tehuti: Still sharp with the senses eh Khado Jefferson?
Panel 3:
We see the two men face to face and Tehuti has a near regal demeanor to himself. Khado and Tehuti are hugging.
Khado and Tehuti: Long time no see! Jinx!!
Page 14
Panel 1
Khado and Tehuti are sitting down across from each other now in a pulled back shot allowing us to be close to them both and still see all of them.
Khado: Still as dorky as ever. How have you been?
Tehuti: About as good as per the situation. Going on a date later.
Khado: You think you still got it do you?
Tehuti: I never lost it. Recognize game son.
Khado: Whatever. Dates were the norm for you so whats the real situation.
Panel 2
We are seeing Tehuti shove a newspaper at Khado in a close shot where we can make out the title which says Destroyed premises: Random act of violence or prediction of things to come?
Tehuti: This is the situation. What the hell do you think you’re doing?
Khado: Oh…wait what?? How do you know I had anything to do with this?
Panel 3
Tehuti is now staring intently at Khado with a look of restrained anger on his face. This is a high shot which is slightly to the side of both men containing the full body of Tehuti and some of Khado’s body.
Tehuti: So explain it to me because this has you written all over it.
Khado: Still don’t get where you got that idea but here’s the situation. Someone raped my sister. Word is being spread on the street about it like it’s a big joke. I find out who did it and took the law into my own hands. See short story.
Panel 4
This is a close shot of Tehuti solely furrowing his brow.
Tehuti: I can’t believe you made such a reckless move. Do you know what the news is calling this? The first step in a war on crime! How can there not be repercussions for this action?
Panel 5
We see someone in the shadows doing a pullup and sweating profusely with light glowing over their back. This is solely so that we can see the person doing this is cut and in a place where people can’t see.
Page 15
Panel 1
Khado is getting up to rebuke the argument of Tehuti. He has a smug look on his face which he assumes he’s right about his decision. He is shaking his face in a way that says some people never learn. Tehuti is looking at Khado like he’s too cocky for his own good. This is a full shot Khado and Tehuti looking at each other.
Khado: The media is clearly blowing this way out of proportion. This was an isolated incident which no one will know about because the dealers involved can’t claim the crime. If they do the question becomes what were they doing there in the first place.
Panel 2
This is a splash panel which is this core of the page which we are seeing a man with dreadlocks doing pushups. This is an establishing shot as he should be the focus of this page. He is in a room filled with exercise material such as free weights, dumbbells, jump ropes and a punching bag dangling in the room. Behind him is a flat screen showcasing the news broadcast of the smoldering building and several other monitors surrounding it showing street maps, video footage of men in suits, street footage of men on corners, and other footage of people in a factory setting shipping something.
Caption: Megan Scotto is here live with another guest speaker, our town’s very own forensic expert Rodney Liefeld. After getting the chance to study the crime scene, Mr. Liefeld, is there anything you can tell us about our mystery vigilante?
Rodney: Well there seems to be severe scarring to some of the bricks that indicate more than just your average case of arson. It’s quite obvious that some kind of gun fight went down here but it is still unclear at this time whether or not this rabid destruction was anything more than a potential gang scuffle gone awry.
Megan: As they often do put somehow I think you’re ducking the issue and that is, are the police able to protect from what is out there?
Panel 3
This should be the top right corner. So I guess the first panel is the top left corner with the second panel being the body of the page and the third panels going on the bottom left. This panel is an full shot of us seeing Khado and Tehuti continue their debate in which Khado is taking a back seat to hear Tehuti talk.
Tehuti: You aren’t looking at the bigger picture here. The media is advertising this situation as a call to arms. There are people who have lived in this city so entrenched in fear they barely leave their homes. And here you come silently and efficiently dealing with long known dealers as if they were roaches to your raid. And you think there won’t be someone on the lookout now for you?
Khado: Didn’t think about that….oh wait I did.
Page 16
Panel 1
This is an overhead shot of Khado talking to Tehuti. Also this is a another big panel in which this takes up most of the page like the previous page.
Khado: You think I didn’t but I did think this through. No one saw me. I used my veil technique.
Tehuti: You mean that oxygen absorbtion maneuver that drains those around you.
Khado: Sometimes it does that. Sometimes it creates illusions. Or a bit of both. Depends what mood I’m in.
Tehuti: But what of the dealers? Or the cops who question them? You think either side will let a rogue slide?
Khado: What choice do they have? Cops can’t find me nor will they hear of me again. The dealers won’t come looking because they won’t know where to start and since it was the main heads they’ll probably push this under the rug for fear of looking weak. I’m telling you this is the last the world is seeing of me as a ‘vigilante’
Tehuti: I hope you don’t have to eat those words son.
Panel 2
This is a full shot of the mystery man doing a back flip. This panel should be in the top left corner.
Panel 3
This is a full shot of the mystery man doing a roundhouse kick after landing the backflip. This should be in the top right corner.
Panel 4
This is another full shot of the mystery man landing after jumping roundhouse kick to a sweep which is landing near the punching bag. The area he is should be spacious enough for him to do all of this. I guess that is a given. This panel should be in the bottom left.
Panel 5
This a medium shot in which are close to the mystery man as he punches the punching bag off the chain landing the bag on the opposite wall with a force strong enough to crack the wall. The punch he uses here is the one inch punch.
Caption: It’s time.
Pages 17-18
This is a double splash page with us looking above from a high angle shot at a group of men dressed in business attire but clearly looking like tough men. There seven men seated at the table total. The man furthest on the left is Drederick Jenkins. He stands at 5’11 but since he is seated in this scene you wouldn’t notice it. He is brown skinned fairly moody in temperament and has ceasar haircut with shredded sideburns. He is slouched to his right wearing a red tie, over a black shirt and an all white suit. Next to him there is Vance Odom colorfully called “Twinkles” on the streets. He is wearing a shiny blue suit over a white shirt with a silver tie. He stands at 5’8 and has a completely shaven head and no facial hair but he has a mouth full of fronts that shine like diamond. He is looking intently with a smirk on his face. Next to him is a lanky light skinned brother named Jaden Jenkins nicknamed Hearse. His suit is the usual black crisp suit with satin cummerbunds and a rose in the suit breast pocket and black tie. He has a few earrings in his left ear none in his right and has twists. Next to him is Brian Williams who is wearing a black tux with a white ruffled shirt no tie. Brian looks like an average business man with his ceasar haircut, dark skin and casual smile. Jamal Turk is next to Brian and he is wearing an all brown suede suit with a white shirt and black tie. He is brown skin, with an earring in each ear wearing a brown and yellow tie. He has a pretty big afro but he wears it stylishly. David Lucas II is next to Jamal and he is wearing a yellow brown suit over a white shirt and a cream tie. He’s dark skin as well and has his hair styled in low twists. No earrings but a mean look is permanently plastered on his face. Finally there is Malcolm Jamal Carter III, a huge mountain of a guy who is quite heavyset but somehow found a suit in his size that is clearly fitted just for him. He stands at 6’11, with no earrings, fairly dark skin and a mean disposition. He is sweating profusely. While he is fat it is a constrained fat which isn’t overlapping his collar. His suit is all black with a black shirt underneath and a white tie. In the center of these men is a round table displaying a holographic image laying out the city in a 3D graph image which you could put your hand through. And surrounding the men sitting are 12 bodyguards who are pretty big in size, wearing the usual black shades and ear pieces to keep up with locations with each other. The room is quite plain otherwise with a digital flatscreen map on the wall we can see right underneath the slogan TRACOR Industries. The symbol has a circle going around the phrase. To our left of that wall there are a few other flat screen monitors the biggest one which we may or not be able to make out because it is a side view should be one of a bandaged Marky and Charlie in suits watching remotely on the screen.
David: Over the last couple weeks there have been talks of a new player entering the mix. An outside force delegating to us what to do. As you know I couldn’t give a fuck about an extra cut of anything. I don’t need to owe nothing to nobody. But there are some of you who are convinced this mother fucker can do something for us. I was against that too. And because of that I have decided that since South D was all mine it going to stay mine. Any Objections?
Malcolm: Yeah D. I got a few. Why you so against him son? The new player ain’t do nothing but deliver his end. We ain’t doing shit else anyway but fighting each other for territory. We got custy’s. We got yayo and cush flooding the blocks. And we got Hearse who no one ever want to say his name out there.
Hearse: Tanks ya. Tanks ya. You far too kind.
Malcolm: Trust me you need to get in on this. We’d make a killing D. The streets need you.
Jamal: If I were you Malcolm I’d slow my role. Lavender end is my district. We stay with the smoothest cush around. Don’t even tink about steppin over there. Any ya’ll.
Brian: This doesn’t do any of us any good to fight like this.
Vance: Preach on Mr. Proper English.
Brian: Ummm yea. As it is we aren’t in as nearly as good of a standing as we need to be. The cops aren’t all in our pockets. We still squabble over local territories and this body count we’re approaching this year is bordering on severe cutbacks on our membership drives. Bottom line we need protection and this ‘player’ has all but guaranteed it for a small fee. We’d be fools not to take it.
Drederick: Whatever man. We done here because we knew this already. You don’t like the new guy, Dave? You want to get back to the roots? Blah. Blah. Blah. Just retire so the real players can get to what they need.
Page 19
Panel 1
This is a wide shot from above the table where the men are holding their argument. We see Dave pounding the table at this point as a few of the guards raise their guns out of there pockets.
Dave: Dammit! Don’t you fools get it? He comes in this won’t be ours no more. We start paying someone else we leasin land? Cut the fuckin’ snake’s head before the sucka has a chance to grow!!
Malcolm: Yo Nigga! Calm down!!
Hearse: Chillax men. Dave was just airing his grievances. It’s wrong to stop a man from grieving.
Panel 2
We see the bottom of the building where the meeting is taking place from the outside in an establishing shot revealing a man in wearing a cape walking up to the building.
Panel 3
A close up medium shot with Hearse and Vance standing up next to each other facing David while Malcolm is slightly perturbed looking up at Hearse and Vance side by side.
Hearse: I know you got your stakes in tings but lookatit dis way, if we don’t do dis wasta stop de cops from pushing us out when they decide easy ain’t free?
Vance: Naw it aint even like that. Cops wan eat for free same as any other trick. Just they can demand a price. Naw mean? The guy we want kick it with is saying that won’t be a factor we let him in. And I say let him in enemy of my enemy…. you kno the rest!
Dave: You talking some shit. And what gonna stop this same hero of yours from turning on you all?
Panel 4
This is a medium shot of a man running out of the building as if something huge is about to happen. He looks like a mailroom clerk. In this shot he is running towards the man in a costume as he flees for what seems to be his life.
Man: Thank you Soul Avenger sir! I wish you would have given me a reward!!!
Soul Avenger: No thanks are necessary. The reward…..
Panel 5
We are back in the boardroom meeting and we see the men are now focused on Brian in a wide shot showcasing the guards putting their guns away and returning to a calm demeanor. Brian looks as focused and commanding as ever as he dictates a new point to the group.
Brian: While this is all well and good that we discuss this matter, more prominently we need to deal with who gets which area and will we truly ‘kick in’ with this man everyone is talking about.
Dave: I ain’t kickin in shit w….
Brian: Hate to cut you off after you argued your point so valiantly but truly we need this matter done away with. Unlike you all I still have very legal transactions to deal with before my 2:30 massage and ex foliage treatment.
Panel 6
We are back outside with Soul Avenger who is twisting a circular object in the center of what should be his belt but it is embedded into the costume.
Soul Avenger: Reward? Isn’t being alive enough these days?
Machine voice: Objective confirmed
Soul Avenger: Beautiful.
Page 20
Panel 1
We see Soul Avenger in a close up shot looking at his wrist which is displaying a graph layout of the building.
Soul Avenger: 39 floors. This should be a cinch.
Panel 2
We are in a close up shot where Soul Avenger is rubbing his wrists and tightening up his gloves.
Panel 3
This is possible the biggest panel encompassing most of the page. Here we see Soul Avenger flying upward with a stern smirk on his face as we see beneath him an explosion blowing out the lobby area of this office complex.
Sfx: CRACKOOOMMM
Soul Avenger: I can’t believe I didn’t think of this sooner. Today all of these sons of a bitches are done!
Page 21
Panel 1
We are back in the room as it is shaking and men are raising their guns out of their holsters and cocking their guns. The main focuses here should be Hearse who carries an older style elongated pistol which looks straight out of a western and Dave who pulls out two .22. Malcolm is looking to Dave for advice. Everyone else looks highly serious and uneasy.
Sfx: VRREEBOOOOM
Dave: Brian, check what the fuck just happened. Hearse you stay behind me. I want to run point. Coming in my fucking building without an appointment. Malcolm, you’re going to watch Hearse’s back just in case. Everyone else be ready for whatever!
Malcolm: You sure this the plan man? Listen you my homey and e’rything but we can’t go out guns blazing. Shouldn’t we check surveillance or something first?
Dave: Brian is on that. Or you pussy?
Panel 2
We see Dave in Malcolm’s face in a medium shot. Dave looks like his eyes might rip Malcolm in half. In back of these men we see a flat screen with a bandaged Marky and Charlie on screen.
Malcolm: Naw homey I’m cool.
Dave: You better be. I ain’t got no time for bullshit. Pop you right now before we go any further. Better to put a pussy nigga down…
Marky: Before you lovely gentlemen get things started I would like to address you men should have this city under control. What seems to be the problem?
Panel 2
This is full shot bird’s eye view of Jamal Turk walking forward with a few bodyguards behind him as though war was awaiting them through the door.
Jamal: Listen I’ve seen enough of this dance, alright? I ain down fa dis. I de deal with ting like dis nuf time and it does call for some swift hurtin. Them dis gone come with me and we gone get de ting done.
Panel 3
We are in a close up shot of the flat screen which Marky and Charlie are watching from. They both look as if they suspect the worst.
Charlie: You do know that news program this morning on tv was about us right? I didn’t want to say nothing but with this happening right now I think ya’ll should know. Some son of a bitch pulled a similar hit on us last night and we was holding a meeting.
Marky: Yessir. You know we just don’t disclose touchy information that might put us in the wrong light. But that man was a menace and a hooligan. This is just the kind of antics we endured at the tune to 0 o’clock today. Sheer horror and for what?
Panel 4
We see Dave staring sternly at the monitor in a medium close up shot with rage as he addresses both men on screen.
Dave: Listen here mother fuckas, don’t tell me who to fear. I run this town. I’m the backbone. I break you ain’t got to long before the shit happens to you. So you’re gonna keep your bitch assness to yourself. Get me?
Marky: Oh no you didn’t….
Charlie: This nigga didn’t just call me a bitch
Panel 5
We see Dave holding his finger up to suggest silence. This is medium slightly high angle shot with him looking on at the doorway as if worried.
Dave: Quiet! Why isn’t there any noise like an alarm going off. Felt like a fucking explosion happened and no alarm. Hallways seem silent too. Dred? Twinkles? Take a look outside see whats up.
Dred: Fuck man
Twinkles: This is not how my days get spent tell you that right now.
Page 22
Panel 1
We are outside of the building witnessing Soul Avenger floating outside of the floor which the meeting is being held on. This is a wide shot. We can see into the hallway in the building where normal business people are walking the floor as the guardsmen are walking as well with their guns out on lookout. The regular people seem both afraid and accustomed to this site.
Panel 2
We are witnessing Soul Avenger crash through the window using his cape as coverage. The people close by are taken aback and shielding themselves from the shards of glass. This is a full shot.
Soul Avenger: Honey I’m Home!
Panel 3
We see Soul Avenger tossing a scale off of his his cape to hit one gunman in his chest. The scale is embedded into his right breast. We are also seeing a light force field covering the back of him while he tosses the scale while the other men including Jamal fire shots incessantly.
Soul Avenger: You don’t have my dinner ready? Whats the matter honey?
Jamal: Keep firing. Fucking freak.
Panel 4
Here is where the madness begins. We are seeing four men fly away from Jamal. The men are surrounding him and Soul Avenger hits them with four attacks one per guy. A elbow to the sternum, a stomp on the kneecap of one gunman behind Soul Avenger and a side kick to the jaw of one man to the left of Jamal and a front kick to the man to the left of Jamal. This can be done with after imaging to demonstrate his speed.
Jamal: What ….?
Panel 5
We are seeing Soul Avenger in a close up shot talking to Jamal one on one. He is about to do the one inch punch on him.
Soul Avenger: I guess that was a little fast for you. Well here let me slow it down for you.
Page 23
Panel 1
We see Jamal flying into the meeting room back first as he shatters the door on his way in. As he hits the door the hallway ignites in flames.
Sfx: Crack. Whoosh
Panel 2
Everyone in this meeting is stepping back covering their faces as the move away from the doorway. This is a medium to full shot with Dave the closest to the doorway pulling back. A few men are looking over at Jamal unsure if the fire forced him into the room or if there was something out there.
Dave: What the fuck is going on!!?
Charlie: Whats going on is we out! Bitch ass nigga
Dave: What did you say?
Panel 3
We are seeing this shot from the front of Dave as he is being kicked in the back with a flying jump kick by Soul Avenger. The flat screen should be in this shot as well however minuscule to showcase that the screen is off and Marky and Charlie are clearly signed off.
SFX: ARRRRGGGGHHHHH
Page 24
This is an establishing shot of Soul Avenger in a fighting stance with his left arm leading. He has a smirk on his face and the background is laced with fire. The room is slightly ravaged due to fire damage.
Soul Avenger: No need to worry about what he said. Why? We’re in hell. Population us. Anything you want engraved on your tombstone?
